Persuasive Writing

Bees are the most important creature on the planet

Gather Ideas

1. Bees get pollen to create honey

2. Bees help make the world a better place

3. Without bees honey doesn't exist

4. Losing bees would be a nightmare

Organise Ideas

1. Bees get pollen to create honey

2.Without bees honey doesn't exist

3. bees aren't as harmful as you think.

Introduction

Bees are the most important creatures on this planet because they get pollen to create honey, without bees honey wouldn't exist and lastly bees are harmless creatures to the world.

We all know that bees get pollen and they take it back to the hive to create honey, except there is much more complex in that situation than it seems because bees take hard work to collect pollen a reason for this is that it might rain on that day or there may be strong winds. A bee could simply die just by collecting pollen that's what makes them the most important creature on the planet.

Another reason is that without bees honey wouldn't exist, that would be a complete nightmare if that happened because kids that love honey would get upset and parents would also get upset, some people might even get frustrated with the situation. An example for this would be not being able to eat honey on toast of eating honey with anything to be exact and that's why I think that bees are very important creatures.

Some people think of bees as dangerous creatures that gives you bee stings and give you pain and frustration it's like walking on pins and needles except it just how your body is feeling after a bee sting, for example bees are harmless because they would only sting you if they think you are harming them. What you do is just stay still and then let them fly away then you will know they aren't so harmful as you think.

bees are the most important creature on the planet because they get or collect pollen to create honey, without bees honey wouldn't exist and finally they aren't as harmful as you think.

Persuasive Writing pt 2

Owning more stuff makes you happier

Gather ideas:

1. Buying new things every month

2. Being rich and having a lot of things

3.Owning a bunch of stuff

4.Knowing how much thing you own.

Organise Ideas:

1. Buying new things every month.

2. Being rich and having a lot of things.

3. knowing how much you own.

Write that Essay Sentences

WALT: Identify WTE sentences to improve our writing.

1. Simple sentence: H.H.S is moving in to Ngā Kāhui.

2. Very short sentence: Ngā Kāhui is one of a kind.

3.  The Power Sentence: Exploring a new built environment with amazement

4. Red, White, and Blue:  Moving to Ngā Kāhui is Unbelieving, joyful, and Amazing.

5. The Adverb Start: Gladly HHS student are moving into the new buildings.

6. Begin with a preposition: Quickly time is coming for everyone to move into the new buildings.

7. The -ing start: 
Seeing a new learning space, gives respectful and grateful thoughts on the environment.

8. The - Ed start: 
Committed and taking responsibility to care and look after the 
Ngā Kāhui buildings.

9. The Semi- Colon:
The time and work put into to action; has given a positive outcome to our school.

10. The Em-Dash: The Ngā Kāhui buildings------with commitment and responsibility------- will be forever grateful learning space.

11. The W- Start: While students wildly wildly amazed, by the knowledgeable learning environment.

12. Explore the subject: The big move has been planned for a number of years and the build will be completed at the end of the term.

Persuasive Writing pt 1

Drugs shouldn't be allowed in sport 

Gather Ideas:

1. Health Risk "There health will be at risk and it could damage their Career".
2.  Sports Fans. Their fans could get very upset or they won't like them.
3. Performance Enhancing Drugs: Them doing well in a game is a great thing to do but using drugs can affect your body.
4. Sportsmanship: It wouldn't be good to have drugs in your body while playing a sport because of your sportsmanship it also wouldn't be fair for the opposite team.
5. Breathing:Depressant drugs such as cannabis, alcohol and opiates, slow down your breathing.

Organise Ideas:

1. Health Risk

2. Sports Fans

3. Breathing

Introduction

 Drugs shouldn't be allowed in sport because of the danger to your body, it is also a health risk, sports fans will get affected and drugs affecting your breathing.

Some people may not give much thought to their health when playing sports other than eating healthy, drinking water and getting enough exercise, except having drugs in your system would be very upsetting to others around you, for example you might be feeling different not only physically but also mentally and spiritually.

Famous players wouldn't be the same if it wasn't for their fans cheering them on during a game. If your fans found out they had drugs in their body  fans could get very upset and feel very down.  When the drugs go down the drain (out of their system) fans would have more positive thoughts and stay thinking positive same with a smile on their faces.

Breathing is a key when playing a sport. The reason for this is oxygen into your lungs and it generates energy for you to carry on in the game, an example could be say if you are running and you breathing starts to slow down and you start to get a weird feeling this is why drugs shouldn't be allowed in sport.

As I said before drugs shouldn't be allowed in sport because of the affects it has on your whole body and your life. The symptoms have been shown in the risk it has on your health also known as health risk, the people supporting you also called sports fans and lastly your breathing and how it affects you.

Macbeth In English

Five questions about Macbeth.
1. Valiant soldier or violent schemer at the beginning?    

He was a valiant soldier at the beginning because he saved Scotland from the bad things like the war against the King of Norway.

2.Why is he obsessed with killing Banquo ( oh yeah Fleance to)

He is obsessed with murdering Banquo and Fleance because he knows that Banquo is starting to be very suspicious about what has happened so far in the play.  He wanted to kill Fleance so then Banquo's children won't become king and their wouldn't be any future kings in banquo's family.

3. He visits the witches a second time. why? does he react?

He visits them a second time because he wants to find out more prophecies about the future. His reaction would be him being happy about none of women born would harm him until the part about Burnham Wood coming up against Dunsinane Castle and he wanted more information about the of th visions he saw. 

4.Explain his decision to murder Lady Macduff & children (increasingly erratic & illogical behaviour)

The witches have told Macbeth to “beware Macduff,” so he thinks Macduff poses a threat to his throne. Also, Macduff has gone to England to help Malcolm (Duncan’s son) rally an army to return to Scotland and defeat Macbeth. In an attempt to get rid of this threat, Macbeth hires murderers to kill Macduff’s family, thinking that this will cause Macduff to submit out of fear and grief.

5.Is he nothing more than a “dead butcher” or do we the audience feel differently about him at the end?

The people in the audience has different opinions about Macbeth my one would be that he is nothing but a dead butcher who killed innocent people for what he wanted for himself and how he killed his own wife for a very harsh reason but in the end what's done is done.

Key adjectives:

Initially:

Courageous, Valiant:

But all’s too weak, For brave Macbeth—well he deserves that name—Disdaining fortune, with his brandished steel, Which smoked with bloody execution, Like valor’s minion carved out his passage Till he faced the slave; Which ne'er shook hands, nor bade farewell to him, Till he unseamed him from the nave to th' chops, And fixed his head upon our battlements 

Appears to be loyal, patriotic, noble:

Loyal: The service and the loyalty I owe in doing it pays itself.

Patriotic: O nation miserable with an untitled tyrant, bloody-sceptered.

Noble: If I say sooth, I must report they were As cannons overcharged with double cracks, So they doubly redoubled strokes upon the foe. Except they meant to bathe in reeking wounds, Or memorize another Golgotha. 

Key adjectives:

Develops into a character that is:

Ambitious: 

"Your hand, your tongue be like the innocent flower, but be the serpent under't".

Deceptive, False:

Class Essay Questions

1. What have I been learning?

I have been learning to Gather and Organise ideas.

1. How have I been learning it?

Writing a list of Ideas for the character. Our class's choice of character was Lady Macbeth e.g 

1. Determined= ‘Smashed Babies’ ‘I would have plucked my nipple from his boneless gums and dashed the brains out, had I so sworn as you have done to this.
2. Loving= Fancies Macbeth
3. Remorseful= Sorry for what she did ‘Out damn spot’

After Gathering the ideas we Organised the ideas so we can write about it in order of the idea.

1. Why have I been learning it?

I have been learning it because when I start doing a essay after camp I would remember how to write a SEXY paragraph.

1. What have I been learning?

I have learnt to write an proper Introduction.

There are many strong and formidable characters in literature, but none can compare to Shakespeare's Macbeth. She had several qualities that audience can like, dislike or admire. Admirable qualities that helped us understand the text include her Determination, her love for Macbeth, Remorse.

1. How have I been learning it?

I have been learning this by  listing the three topics and the play your using in this case it is Macbeth

1. Why have I been learning it?

1. What have I been learning?
2. How have I been learning it?
3. Why have I been learning it?

The Salvation Army Winter Appeal

How does the text construct a version of reality? 

This text can be constructed as a reality because the person/ child looks cold. The objects around her or him gives you a sign that she or he is living in poverty. I know that there are families out there in the world that are struggling because of poverty. One other reason could be they don't have enough money to provide them with the things they need.

What is the text about? How do we know?

This text is about the Salvation Army Winter Appeal. It is also about helping other families keep warm in the winter and having food. We know this by the objects around her and the colour scheme for example half of the Paige has bright and warm colours and the other side has dark and cold colours like black, white and grey. This in encouraging people to donate money to help people in need.